I am shamed by the gratuitous use of italics in my first chapter. Other than that, I’m hovering in Chapter five, where, unbeknown to me prior to this revision, I had fumbled the emotional ball.
“Dirty rotten pigskin!” curse I. (I’m running with the fumble metaphor–can you tell?)
It’s amazing how a change in POV can make you realize how a character has been completely left out of the emotional progression of the story. At least I know what’s wrong, now.
I’m going for the Hail Mary…